Excerpt of Raining Darkness

'Kay. So here is my first real tid-bit of my story. Well, actually this was an experiment of first person writing (normally I write in third person), but I like the way it is going from this perspective, so yeah.

This excerpt of my writing is unedited (except for spelling which was, like automatic since I wrote this on a computer) . Also, this is going to be fairly confuzzling for those who don't know anything about my story, but it will all smooth out in time.

The Excerpt: I clenched my fists closed my eyes and concentrated with all my might. Something inside of me stretched only to be pushed back, forcibly. I saw the scene in my head that wasn't really there. Moreover, I felt the push and pull. The give and take. The riot in my mind that was my unique power flexing versus the binding power that was the Containing Bracelets, I wore on both of my wrists. Recently, my power had been fighting and straining against the bands on my wrist that made me unable to use my power all the time. The vision in my head expanded until it let nothing I was truly seeing seep through. I trembled. The image showed my power as a blinding yellow light, tightly contained in an invisible cube. It folded upon itself, condensing until it was nothing but a tiny sun. Suddenly, it assaulted the box barrier-the Containing Bracelets. The box enlarged itself to make room for the yellow power. Again and again the sun-like power sunk inside its self then thrust itself at the barrier, each time gaining more on the bracelets. Every time that the bracelets retreated some more, I felt a release. I knew now that I could, if I wanted to, teleport into the next room. But again the cube bloated and I felt that anymore pressure on the Containing Bracelets, they would snap. My powers screamed to rid itself of the hated bracelets. My mind screamed for it to stop. The power, once more gathered itself in to a sphere and, once more, slammed at the barrier. As soon the wall holding my power back dissolved in my mind, it also dissolved in reality. Though, "dissolve" was the wrong word. I saw it more as an explosion. I regained my sight quickly enough to see the silver, glinting bracelets fly off my wrist.

The pieces flew in all different directions. Though, the "explosion" was silent, the metallic chunks caught the attention of my fellow pupils. The girl in front of my whimpered her pain. And that was the last thing I conprended as portion of the bracelets leaped straight at my face.

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